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Thursday, April 23, 2020

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Two men called wesley and saia were telling each other “should we go out fishing”. 

Wesley and Saia went on a boat then they got woosh by the gynoums waves.
they went on an island but they were still alive.  they were hungry and thirsty.
helicopters were looking if there were people on the island, so they saw the help
sign and talked them to safety. wesley said saia i'm not gonna go fishing again, saia
said why are you a chicken, hahahaha as saia was laughing at wesley.

Its short ik 

5 comments:

  1. This story has Fulstops in the correct place. Maybe next time you could use more dialogue and punctuations.

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  2. this story has a good dialogue. maybe next time you can use more detail.

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  3. nice intro but need some work on detail:)

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  4. very cool nice intro next time use dialogue

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